Feedback & critique from MediaDog

Through a mutual friend I have been able to get in contact with some media professionals who will be able to give us some feedback on our draft music video, hopefully before tomorrow when we refilm and after we have shot and edited our final music video. This feedback/critique will help us improve our music video in production (filming) and post-production (editing) to a very high and professional standard.

"Media Dog are a broadcast equipment hire company owned and run by Rob Shaw and Mark Tredinnick. Both are BBC and ITV trained as lighting cameramen, between them they have over 20 years of experience in broadcast and video production at the highest level."- mediadoghire.com

Below is the email I sent to Rob & Mark, I am waiting for a reply which will hopefully include some rough critique/feedback.

Today I received a reply from Gavin... 

Some of the feedback Gavin gave me in his email are things our group (myself, Phoebe & Jess), or our teacher has already picked up on e.g. disjointed shots due to change in lighting & black frames- editing issues. However, the critique on the 'establishing shot' is something that we had not picked up, but we have taken Gavin's advice on board and will shoot neccessary footage tomorrow to see if this will work better in our music video and raise the standard to a professional level.
We are really grateful for Gavin's professional advice, he has also agreed to view our final cut of the music video and give us some more feedback that will be useful in our evaluation and help us see how an audience would view our product.